I agree with brook that the snare doesn't pop through enough!
Also for me the vocals need to be in front of the track more. the guitar seems to become the focal point of the song in your remix. imo
As another suggestion for the snare: Maybe do a heavy attack with a transient shaper, and possibly play around with having a dedicated bus that has a slight delay on it. Have the snare sent to it, and have it come in here and there through the song.
Solid remix, thanks for sharing!