[Electronic] First attempt to make a song (in this genre)
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Old 21-10-2012, 10:13 AM   #1
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[Electronic] First attempt to make a song (in this genre)

This is my first attempt to do an uptempo smoth electronic-track.
Need some feedback on it so I know what to work on and what's good already.



Thank you!

This isn't my first track ever but it's my first track in this genre.

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Old 21-10-2012, 10:31 AM   #2
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

Not much to add really, I personally don't like the organ sound, but it's only personal preference, maybe the volume of the voice sample should be lower, but I'm being really picky....

Good job.

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Old 21-10-2012, 10:54 AM   #3
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

Dig the smooth bass and all the little things going on...that shaker sound works really well. Last half could do with a little variation, but otherwise nicely done .
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Old 21-10-2012, 11:17 AM   #4
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

Thank you guys!

Yeah, you might be right scyn, the second part may need som variations.

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Old 22-10-2012, 03:01 AM   #5
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

Hey. I think your lying to us you have done this b4
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Old 22-10-2012, 03:30 AM   #6
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

You have 26 songs just on soundclick and 3000 followers. I came to listen to your tune because you said it was your first attempt. Please explain why I am so confused.
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Old 22-10-2012, 08:20 AM   #7
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

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Hey. I think your lying to us you have done this b4
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You have 26 songs just on soundclick and 3000 followers. I came to listen to your tune because you said it was your first attempt. Please explain why I am so confused.
Sorry, maybe my topic subject is a bit missleading.
I've done some tracks before, but no electronic-tracks.

So it's my first attempt but not my first song ever.

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Old 22-10-2012, 08:28 AM   #8
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

Your first page at Soundcloud is all Electronic tracks. Along with page 2 and 3 Most misleading eh?

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Old 22-10-2012, 08:53 AM   #9
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Your first page at Soundcloud is all Electronic tracks. Along with page 2 and 3 Most misleading eh?
This thread is not about if this track was my first attempt in this genre or not.
If I feel this my first attempt to make a track in this genre then it is.

This thread is about the feedback I asked for in the first post.

Thank you Automageddon, scyn and xNOISEx for the feedback.

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Old 22-10-2012, 08:55 AM   #10
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

I like the song actually. A really nice electro dub. But come on make a honest thread title And description.

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Old 22-10-2012, 08:58 AM   #11
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

Sorry to be a duche. I really expected a real newcomer.

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Old 22-10-2012, 09:08 AM   #12
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

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Sorry to be a duche. I really expected a real newcomer.

Sorry to make you disappointed.
I'll make a better topic subject and description next time!

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Sorry to make you disappointed.
I'll make a better topic subject and description next time!
Changed the title so there's no confusion .
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Changed the title so there's no confusion .

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Old 22-10-2012, 09:55 AM   #15
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Re: [Electronic] First attempt to make a song

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Last half could do with a little variation, but otherwise nicely done .
i agree, maybe variation in the drums, a little slow section with only the base elements dropping back to the main sounds...just my opinion though.
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Something about the bass is fucking with your spectrum, it's clashing with the sub bass frequencies as well. It's just a muddy mix, but not a horrible song - I just think you could have done a way better job fine-tuning it.
I tried to give the EQ another round. Do you think it's better?

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