I've had a girlfriend I used to play my stuff for, and she told me sooo many times that my tunes sound like computer games - like Rayman - and I think it's good to get second opinions, but sometimes it distracts more than it helps..
at first the thought annoyed me a bit that I couldn't change my way of composing/mixing/whatever, but the fact is I like the way I do things and as time's gone by my sound has been maturing naturally, and I've learned more especially from taking different approached.. Have you tried sampling a song you like on top of your own to figure out if it's the key you're going for? or to see if it harmonizes in some way..
My advice is to sit down, think of what you want, maybe even try to break down something you've listened to and then reproduce as much as you can.. not to copy, but to find new ways, since it's usually easier to copy than invent something new (in some genres of course..)
There's a ton of possibilities in just one track effect, so if you're using many (maybe too many?), try to sit down and focus on one at a time, so you gain control of the things you use.
I liked the track, and I can see what you meant by it being a bit game sounding. I'm thinking an intro to something action packed.. not rayman!
But what I noticed is that it felt like it wanted to peak - like a long rise to a climax.. Could be nice with something finishing it off.. a crash and something big sounding..