I really like the start, hope this is good
0:35 when the kick hits, i like the idea. You really really need more layers of everything, 1 more layer of bass, some background sound to fill and empty space and you got a great one. In my opinion man.
Hey good job you did over there
I think you can manipulate the vocal keys a little bit more try to use then in midi with kontakt or if you are a fl user just drag them the to the piano roll and play around with the keys of the vocal just like you do with melody and see what feets in the best